Is Goonj mein bhi tanhayee ka mela hai.
Kahin aankhen churana,
Kabhi nazrein jhukana,
Khamoshi ka daav, waqt ne khela hai.
Kehna tha kuchh, to keh diya hota,
Kuchh hota is layak to sun liya hota,
Par kehne sunnne ka jatan albela hai;
Is mehfil mein,kya koi aur bhi akela hai?
36 comments:
As for the last line : it gave me an impression that you are seeking someone who thinks / feels like you within the silence of that same room...
Amazing HK...
Read both the posts...
If I was Yashita you would have got a big hug from me...
You couldn't have summed it up better...
I'm soooooo jealous of you... because I know you've writen this in about 30 seconds...or so...
So beautifully written...so swiftly written...
But what sup? How come you have a "akeyla and tanhaiee" and all wala post? Not like you to write stuff like that...
What happened to Happy Singh?
hamare aas paas bhi kuch aisa hi mela hai..
waah! harjee
Very nice..
wah wah...!
*wunderin where yash is*
bet she'd luv to read this...
That's beautiful Mr Kapur. Wish I could rhyme that well. Hell. I can't rhyme even if my life depended on it.
Great Hindi.:)
wow!!! I am speechless! seriously, this is the biggest compliment I've ever received for any of my posts!! heheh..thanks!!
and bout this post,
"Bhari mehfil mein dil akela hai;
Is Goonj mein bhi tanhayee ka mela hai.
"...beautiful!
"Kahin aankhen churana,
Kabhi nazrein jhukana,
Khamoshi ka daav, waqt ne khela hai.
"....lol, hmnn;)
"Kehna tha kuchh, to keh diya hota,
Kuchh hota is layak to sun liya hota"...wish, ppl just say what's on their mind! instead of expecting others to guess!!life would be so much better!
"Is mehfil mein,kya koi aur bhi akela hai?
"...a million ppl but still a lonely world...
wonderful post...thank you, I am truly honored!!
Kahi jaye har baat zuban se hi,zaruri to nahi,
Bikhar kar hi paimaane se
maiy apna hona jatla jaye,zaruri to nahi.
Keh deti hai khamoshi bhi bohut kuch,
Paimaane mein uchalti maiy ke paas bhi hai bohut kuch kehne ko,yahi sab samajh jaayen,zaruri to nahi....
well well well! Your wonderful poetry has inspired so many more... all really good!
Like I mentioned on Yashita's blog too...I think we are all, emotionally caught up in similar kinds of thought processes... which is why all of us seem to have written on the same topic...
loved ur blog!
will keep visiting.. thanks for dropping by mine! See you again soon.
Nice stuff...Very deep!!
Many of us are alone even though we have so many people around us...Thts an irony!
Now thats some good poetry dude. Just wish I knew hindi better. Wouldnt have to ruin the experience by having to translate every word before understanding the lines.
I like the whole 'alone in a crowd' concept...been there done that.
Know whats totally freaky though..feeling many people around you when you are alone in a room! :)
so looks like writing abt room full of strangers is the flavour of the week!
Lovely poem...:-)
Makes u realise how eventually we are all alone...!
hmmmm...
too cool... encore...
nice!!
awesome... how simply and beuatifully u have put the feeling of being lonely in the crowd.... reminds me of a jagjit singh ghazal shich goes something like...
koi dost hai na rakeeb hai tera shahar kitna ajeeb hai...
good one
i skipped this one ... coz i find reading hindi poems were tiring .... and i usually forget what i started reading by the time i get to the end
"Kehna tha kuchh, to keh diya hota,
Kuchh hota is layak to sun liya hota,"
kya sab kuch kehke bhi samjha jata hai...
kya kabhi na chahte hue bhi, khamoshi samjhi jaati hai?
"Is mehfil mein,kya koi aur bhi akela hai?"
kya is mehfil mein sabhi akele to nahin, kya tanhai dubane hi to nahi aaye yahaan ye ...
NICE POEM!
btw- this is about the previous post..
u work for JWT?! DID YOU GO FOR CANNES?!
that sounds awesome.. im tryin to get into BMM..ur lyf sounds pretty cool that way..
but its sad how we become exactly what we despise..
uh oh.. "ambitious take off on cannes" goa is bad.
just ran through this one(cos of Hindi with due respect to the language) but liked all the others.
I love reading blogs by copywriters. have bookmarked you.
just went thru ur profile description !
Harjee,
It was simply beautiful. You write very well.
Also would like to thank you for your generous appreciation.
Smiles!
Saher
worst thing abt me is I DONT KNOW HINDI :(
now why are you taking so long to update! waiting for people to come n beg hahn!
wah! wah!
:( never did get any mail!!! and now my time alone is comin to an end *sigh*...
bahottt busy ho kya? yaha update bhi nahi kiya? u ok ??
Hi there, my first visit here..and my comment isn't about ur post..My Hindi isn't all that great to comment on a piece of poetry..:)..Nevertheless, your profile is very interesting..Copywriter, hmm..cool! I love advertising myself though I moved into journalism! :)..will keep visiting..
Harjee,
just visiting, Liked the flow :)
akelepan ki baat par bhi
aapke paas, kehnae ko kya kucuh nahi
kuchh nahi kehtae
toh hum akelehi, akele rehjatae
Just wanted to praise your skills.
Tanhai is favorite word.
I remembered a ghazal sung by Pankaj Udhas once after reading your post. Mere Baad Kahaan Jayagi Tanhai... Mai Mara To Mar Jayagi Tanhai...
Your poem is great... could relate to it. A typical Cancerian Stuff.
Thank you all.
Have not replied to all your comments.
For one, this post was inspired. So the credit goes to Yashita.
Second, it was about being alone.
Love you all.
Cheers
Yeh duniya, ek mehfil..
aur hum sab aakele..
kahani mein twist ho...le le.
bas itni si baat hai...
itni kahani...
dost ise hi kehte hain..zindagani!!
Anshubaba
hey....VERY NICE...provided a much needed relief on a very busy day...thanks :)
Absolutely divine!!
sundar!!!!
sundar!!!
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